Saturday, September 6, 2014

Snippet Sunday


Weekend Writing Warriors



 Sunday authors post 8 to 10 lines of something they are writing, something they are editing, or something that is already unleashed on the public. Visit this site to read their snippets and discover some exciting new writers.    Weekend Writing Warriors



Background to my snippet

Pastry chef Lily Peradou steps into the alley behind her shop and discovers she is not the only one interested in the vacant shop next door. 

Snippet from Chocolate Couture

The man jiggled the door handle. It was locked, of course.
Maybe he was a relative of Sally’s. If he were related, she would like to talk to him and make an offer for the store. The perfect solution for her space problem was 5 Smith Street.

Dwarfed by the giant metal container, Lily felt a temporary sense of security. She used her advantage to assess the situation and the stranger. He didn’t look like a tourist. There was no sign of a camera or guidebook. He didn’t walk with a leisurely stroll of someone sightseeing. His stride was with purpose.

Hope you enjoy these snippets and follow the wonderful authors who wrote them.

Peace, Love, and Chocolate
Zelda

16 comments:

  1. I like the way she clarifies how she knows he's not a tourist. Mentioning his stride is powerful.

    http://joycelansky.blogspot.com/2014/09/weekend-writing-warriors-september-6.html

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    1. Thanks, Joyce. It's always nice to hear an encouraging comment.

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  2. Uh-oh . . . I'm sensing a potential property fight! Tough on Lily, great for readers. :)

    Nice snippet!

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    1. Not your average property fight, but definitely a conflict over the vacant store.

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  3. Hmm, not a tourist, but not a relative if he doesn't have a key. Suspenseful snippet, Zelda. :)

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  4. Immediately intriguing and I can't wait to read more. Terrific snippet!

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  5. Somehow I doubt he's just looking for space.

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  6. I like the address, "5 Smith Street."
    Has a Holmesian quality about it.
    Kudos!

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    1. Although this isn't a mystery, Lily's address is even more intriguing. Her shop is at 4 1/2 Smith Street.

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  7. Mysterious man in an alley. Very intriguing.

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  8. You had me at chocolate. Stayed for the writing.

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    1. It's always about the chocolate. Thanks.

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  9. Nice :-) Good details make it easy to visualize, and we got a glimpse of her character. Nicely done, Zelda!

    And I LOVE the chocolate theme :-) !

    Now I'm putting on my moderator hat. Please try to stay to 8 sentences. :-) You could do it with a semicolon here and a comma there. It sounds like we're being picky, but really, we try to keep it fair for everyone. :-)

    Have a great week--see you next Sunday. :-)

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  10. You've peaked my curiosity. Looking forward to learning more about this man, and this alley, and this now vacant shop : )

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  11. You have really captured the process of assessing your environment when in a tense and unsure situation!

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