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Background to my snippet

Pastry chef Lily Peradou steps into the alley behind her shop and discovers she is not the only one interested in the vacant shop next door. 

Snippet from Chocolate Couture

The man jiggled the door handle. It was locked, of course.
Maybe he was a relative of Sally’s. If he were related, she would like to talk to him and make an offer for the store. The perfect solution for her space problem was 5 Smith Street.

Dwarfed by the giant metal container, Lily felt a temporary sense of security. She used her advantage to assess the situation and the stranger. He didn’t look like a tourist. There was no sign of a camera or guidebook. He didn’t walk with a leisurely stroll of someone sightseeing. His stride was with purpose.

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Peace, Love, and Chocolate
Zelda
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16 comments:

  1. Catch My WordsSeptember 6, 2014 at 8:21 PM

    I like the way she clarifies how she knows he's not a tourist. Mentioning his stride is powerful.

    http://joycelansky.blogspot.com/2014/09/weekend-writing-warriors-september-6.html

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    1. Zelda BenjaminSeptember 6, 2014 at 9:03 PM

      Thanks, Joyce. It's always nice to hear an encouraging comment.

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  2. Sarah WSeptember 7, 2014 at 5:29 AM

    Uh-oh . . . I'm sensing a potential property fight! Tough on Lily, great for readers. :)

    Nice snippet!

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    1. Zelda BenjaminSeptember 7, 2014 at 2:57 PM

      Not your average property fight, but definitely a conflict over the vacant store.

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  3. Siobhan MuirSeptember 7, 2014 at 8:57 AM

    Hmm, not a tourist, but not a relative if he doesn't have a key. Suspenseful snippet, Zelda. :)

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  4. Veronica ScottSeptember 7, 2014 at 9:31 AM

    Immediately intriguing and I can't wait to read more. Terrific snippet!

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  5. AnonymousSeptember 7, 2014 at 10:18 AM

    Somehow I doubt he's just looking for space.

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  6. FCEtierSeptember 7, 2014 at 11:27 AM

    I like the address, "5 Smith Street."
    Has a Holmesian quality about it.
    Kudos!

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    1. Zelda BenjaminSeptember 7, 2014 at 3:01 PM

      Although this isn't a mystery, Lily's address is even more intriguing. Her shop is at 4 1/2 Smith Street.

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  7. Meka JamesSeptember 7, 2014 at 12:09 PM

    Mysterious man in an alley. Very intriguing.

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  8. UnknownSeptember 7, 2014 at 12:51 PM

    You had me at chocolate. Stayed for the writing.

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  9. Teresa CypherSeptember 7, 2014 at 4:11 PM

    Nice :-) Good details make it easy to visualize, and we got a glimpse of her character. Nicely done, Zelda!

    And I LOVE the chocolate theme :-) !

    Now I'm putting on my moderator hat. Please try to stay to 8 sentences. :-) You could do it with a semicolon here and a comma there. It sounds like we're being picky, but really, we try to keep it fair for everyone. :-)

    Have a great week--see you next Sunday. :-)

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  10. UnknownSeptember 7, 2014 at 9:48 PM

    You've peaked my curiosity. Looking forward to learning more about this man, and this alley, and this now vacant shop : )

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  11. UnknownSeptember 8, 2014 at 6:01 AM

    You have really captured the process of assessing your environment when in a tense and unsure situation!

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